Hey Gina! It looks like there’s a typo in Aster’s dialogue in the last panel. It should be “Holly” not “Holly’s”. Other than that I’m loving the dynamic between these three so much. I’ve been aching to see the poly ship play out since we got the first inklings of it a few chapters ago. Can’t wait to see how it goes!
Aster is being a bit ungrammatic on this page. Is this intentional casual speak or…?
I’d expect “Holly’s made it easy” or “Holly makes it easy” or “Holly’s making it easy”
Half the discussion here is about grammar. It’s not like I didn’t stumble over that typo as well. But the artwork and expressions and story-writing are brilliant and it would be a shame to drown out that part of the feedback.
Taking a look at the first two images, it is hard to avoid the impression that Gina loves working with a camera (focusing details in the first image, perspective distortions in the second). The second image shows typical wide-angle artifacts in falling lines and a bit volume distortion for Aster’s face. Maybe Gina is saving up for a large frame camera and/or a tilt-shift lens?
Sometimes it feels like she has dolls of all the actors, puts up her scenes, photographs them and then traces the lines. But that still would not buy the expressiveness…
And before the rendition, there is the storyline. It’s too easy to get used to the quality of all that to a degree where the first thing one recognizes is a typo. Doesn’t make the greatest feedback to an artist…
Most of what I’m impressed by, I don’t know how to put into words, which I think says a lot about the artwork. I do notice many things and also miss many things, because there is a lot to notice.
It is better if those things are caught before this goes to print…
And everyone posting about this though they were the first to do so because of the comment approval delay.
I do love when people notice things I wouldn’t, like the race topic from the last one completely frew over my head.
I love the perspective shot of Holly and Aster’s faces in the second panel. Their faces look so angular, and it’s actually really awesome to see. Holly’s face looks particular more defined, and it helping to put across that he is older than Ivy and Aster which of course brings with it its own dynamic to their relationship. And Aster’s hair style, now that it’s long enough to be tied back, has made zir facial profile stand out and I think the way is frame zir face looks really nice.
In that same panel though, I don’t know if Ivy’s left leg lifted up behind her works anatomically. I feel like her pelvis would need be rotated further back on the left side. Or, her left leg/ankle should not go that far over to the right horizontally, and instead be more kicked back than across. (Sorry if this comes across as nitpicky. You know I love your work! ❤️ )
Hey Gina! It looks like there’s a typo in Aster’s dialogue in the last panel. It should be “Holly” not “Holly’s”. Other than that I’m loving the dynamic between these three so much. I’ve been aching to see the poly ship play out since we got the first inklings of it a few chapters ago. Can’t wait to see how it goes!
I think “Holly’s” refers to his progress.
Everyone seems to be getting alone. Yay! I hope they can stay that way when the peace making is done.
Thanks for catching the typo! Fixed!
These last few pages touched my heart so much T_T
Aster is being a bit ungrammatic on this page. Is this intentional casual speak or…?
I’d expect “Holly’s made it easy” or “Holly makes it easy” or “Holly’s making it easy”
It was just a typo. ^_^;
VISUAL SYMBOLISM ALERT
Look at the colour of their drinks and their shirts.
I positively love these details
Ivy’s bags also match their shirts!
Half the discussion here is about grammar. It’s not like I didn’t stumble over that typo as well. But the artwork and expressions and story-writing are brilliant and it would be a shame to drown out that part of the feedback.
Taking a look at the first two images, it is hard to avoid the impression that Gina loves working with a camera (focusing details in the first image, perspective distortions in the second). The second image shows typical wide-angle artifacts in falling lines and a bit volume distortion for Aster’s face. Maybe Gina is saving up for a large frame camera and/or a tilt-shift lens?
Sometimes it feels like she has dolls of all the actors, puts up her scenes, photographs them and then traces the lines. But that still would not buy the expressiveness…
And before the rendition, there is the storyline. It’s too easy to get used to the quality of all that to a degree where the first thing one recognizes is a typo. Doesn’t make the greatest feedback to an artist…
Most of what I’m impressed by, I don’t know how to put into words, which I think says a lot about the artwork. I do notice many things and also miss many things, because there is a lot to notice.
It is better if those things are caught before this goes to print…
And everyone posting about this though they were the first to do so because of the comment approval delay.
I do love when people notice things I wouldn’t, like the race topic from the last one completely frew over my head.
Arrrgh. Still can’t tell what it’s a model of. Frustration, frustration.
What? I’ve got my own priorities. 🙂
I love the expressions and the gestures in this page! Especially the last panel, and I love how they’re complimenting each other too!
I love the perspective shot of Holly and Aster’s faces in the second panel. Their faces look so angular, and it’s actually really awesome to see. Holly’s face looks particular more defined, and it helping to put across that he is older than Ivy and Aster which of course brings with it its own dynamic to their relationship. And Aster’s hair style, now that it’s long enough to be tied back, has made zir facial profile stand out and I think the way is frame zir face looks really nice.
In that same panel though, I don’t know if Ivy’s left leg lifted up behind her works anatomically. I feel like her pelvis would need be rotated further back on the left side. Or, her left leg/ankle should not go that far over to the right horizontally, and instead be more kicked back than across. (Sorry if this comes across as nitpicky. You know I love your work! ❤️ )